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  Raven walked through the hall ways of the tower, caressing her massive stomach, which squirmed and sloshed to either side.  Her hunger had taken over again, and a random mugger had found himself in Raven's belly.
  But now, she had finally worked up the nerve to tell someone.  Starfire.  But, she still wasn't ready to tell anyone else.  Thankfully, she had reached Starfire's door.  Taking a deep breath, she knocked.  Before Starfire answered, Raven considered leaving, but it was too late.
  "Hello!"  Starfire greeted her, throwing her arms out.  
  "Hi."  Raven said, looking around.  "Hey, do you think I could come in there?"  She asked, still hiding her huge belly.
  "Of course."  Starfire replied, making way for her freind.
  Raven quickly came in, making sure her stomach stayed under her cloak.  "Thanks."  She said, sitting down on Starfire's bed.
  Starfire nodded, walking over.  "So, is there something you need?  Can I be of assistance?"  She asked eagerly, sitting down beside Raven.
  Raven shook her head.  "All I need you to do is listen.  And please don't freak out."  Raven pleaded, waiting until Starfire nodded to continue.  "All right.  You know that I'm half demon, right?"  Leaning her head back, she suppressed a loud belch.  "Well, as a half demon, I have a very large appetite."  She said, letting a little secret out already.  She generally never ate much in front of the others.  "And sometimes I can't control myself..."  She trailed off, wondering how to finally break this.  At least Starfire wasn't pressing her to keep going.  That was one thing she liked about Starfire; she was so nice and understanding.  "Well, I have these urges, and...when I lose control...I eat people."  She finally spat it out, mortified as soon as the words left her mouth.
  Starfire simply stared at her for a moment.  Then began to giggle, before going into full blown laughter.  "You sounded so serious!"  She said through fits of laughter.  
  Raven gritted her teeth.  "I was serious!"  She said angrily, considering showing her.  (If it's the only way.)  She thought, pulling her cloak off, revealing her massive belly.  The movement had ceased, and it gave quiet gurgles.
  Starfire gasped, pulling back.  "You-you..."  She trailed off, speechless.
  Raven looked down.  "If it makes things better, it's only happened to criminals."  She placed a hand on her swollen belly.  "And I'd never eat an innocent."
  Starfire nodded slowly, clearly trying to think off something to say.  "I don't want to judge you, but this is...freaky."  She said simply, obviously too stunned for anything else.
  Raven nodded, leaning her head back.  "I know, and that's why I've tried to hide it."  She agreed, wondering if it had been a good idea to tell her.  "If you don't want to talk about it..."
  "No, it is fine."  Starfire said, putting a hand on her friend's shoulder.  "It is rather interesting."
  "Really?"  Raven asked, taken aback.  "I thought that everyone would freak out."  She said, giving a weak laugh.
  Starfire fidgeted a little.  "I was wondering, if, you could give me a demonstration?"  She asked meekly.
  Raven gave a blank stare, her mouth agape.  That wasn't a reaction she had expected.
  "Uh..."  She trailed off, her mind desperately searching for an answer.  "Sure..."  She agreed, embarrassed.  
  "Oh, thank you."  Starfire said, giving her friend a hug.  "When can I see?"  She asked.
  Raven sighed.  "Once I'm done digesting him."  She said, standing to leave.  She quickly walked out, wondering how she thought this was a good idea.  (Well, what's done is done.)  She thought, going back to her room.  As she sat on her bed, she realized that Starfire was the only one she had told, and there was no way she was risking the others find out, so going out to eat was out of the question.  And so was eating anyone on the team.  (I hope Star doesn't mind, being the demonstration.)  She thought, grabbing a book to read....

  Hours later, the sun setting outside, Starfire and Raven stood in the latter's room, Starfire making sure the door was shut.  Raven's formerly tremendous belly had shrunk back to it's normal size, and growled loudly.
  "So. your okay with this?"  Raven asked, surprised she had convinced her friend so easily.  Then again, the fact that she could spit her back out probably helped.
  "Yes, of course." Starfire said cheerily, clasping her hands together.  "What must I do?"  She asked eagerly.
  "Well, it would make it easier if you floated above me."  Raven suggested, waiting until Starfire did so.  "Remember, try not to fight it when I swallow,"  She said, taking her feet, "It'll go by much faster."  She said, taking Starfire's shoes off.  She certainly didn't want to taste those.
  Taking a deep breath, she pushed Starfire's feet into her mouth.  Starfire giggled, the sensation tickling her.  Raven, on the other hand, moaned a little, delighted by the taste of her friend.  She swallowed, pulling in Starfire's ankles.  Swallowing again, she grabbed Starfire's legs, using them for leverage.  She swallowed again, reaching her knees.
  "This feels so odd."  Starfire giggled, as Raven pulled in her thighs.
  Raven reached her waist with another gulp, her stomach beginning to bulge slightly.  Grabbing Starfire's arms, she swallowed again, reaching her stomach.  As she swallowed again, her mouth widened over Starfire's arms, and stopped over her chest.  Trying not to stay there long, Raven swallowed, reaching Starfire's neck.  Starfire gave her a small wink.  Raven made the last swallow, forcing Starfire's head down her throat.  Raven let out a loud belch, as her stomach pressed forward, stretching out her leotard.
  "Well, that was better than I thought."  Raven said, placing a hand atop her massive belly.  "How are you doing in there?"  She asked, feeling Starfire shift around inside her.
  "Very good."  Starfire replied, finally coming to a stop.  "Though, it is a little, cramped."
  "Sorry."   Raven chuckled, sitting down on her bed, and letting her stomach hang out.  The huge orb reached out about three feet from her body, glorping and sloshing as it moved into place.  Raven enjoyed the feeling that it caused, something that she'd felt before.  "Star, you mind if you stay for a while?"  Raven asked, patting her gut.
  "Not at all freind!"  Came her muffled reply, as she shifted to the side.
  Raven smiled, grabbing a book.  Before she read, she started to think.
  "Maybe,"  She said to herself, rubbing her stomach, "Beast boy would like to join you."  She gave a devilish smile, and started to plan...
Finally finished! I thought I would never finish this one. Anyway, I wanted to continue, since Raven is my definite favorite from the show.

Tell me what you think!
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
are you going to continue this? i would love to read more. wonder what Robin's reaction will be.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner May 29, 2013
I keep telling myself I will, but I don't really have a working computer right now. :) Shock, borderline insanity maybe?
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
perhaps then again writers block?
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner May 30, 2013
:) Well, I'll have to wait until next week to get my computer fixed, and until then I cant write.
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Is there a library where you live that is close by? im on a library computer right now.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
No, I have to rely on my tablet or my phone at the moment.
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
well that sucks.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
I know. :(
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HungryScorpion Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Wonder what Raven's evil plan is? Great story by the way!
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
Well, hopefully I'll get around to writing it. =)
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HungryScorpion Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
Sounds good!
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013
XD
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Subject-Delta12 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011
This is pretty good!
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011
Thanks, appreciate it!
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thegamer883 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011
i like
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011
Thanks!
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thegamer883 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011
welcome
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
well here is the link to your request.[link]
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011
Thanks man, It's awesome! Looks great!
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
sorry if it looks like crap i wish i was a master artist.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011
Nah, it's okay, I like it.
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
still wish it was a masterpiece. then you could be impressed.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011
Hey, noone's perfect. Better than my usual drawings.
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
hey do you do these stories cause you have a fetish for it or cause it's funny?
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2011
Fetish, or because of odd interest. It's both for me. I like things that others have fetish for, but I don't.

Why ask?
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
you are going to make another one right? with beast-boy or robin as the victims?
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011
I will, but after I finish some other things first. And yes, Beastboy is a definite victim.
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
i like reading about beast-boy being eaten specially by raven. i wish you could draw a picture of raven devouring the titans that would look so cool.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011
Well, maybe I would, but there's one simple problem. I can't draw people AT ALL. Objects, I can work with. But I can't draw a good looking person to save my life.

Though I have offered people stories in exchange for drawings, but I haven't gotten any takers.
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
i can try to do my best at drawing something but im only good at traditional drawings plus i have grown used to drawing sonic characters. but for you i will try.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011
That's very appreciated! Thanks, really!
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Sparks789462 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
so what is it that you would like to me to draw?
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011
I suppose Raven having eaten Starfire.
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FuzzyNecromancer Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
Okay, the second half makes a bit more sense, and again, the hints of character show through, like Starfire's naive approach to strange experience and Raven's "Not going anywhere for a while, might as well read." You have more of a grip on Starfire's dialogue-voice in the second half of part two.

I look forward to part 3 if you decide to write it. :) You've definately produced an above-average vore fanfic.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
Thanks, I do try with characters. And yeah, for some reason I can't pin, I seem pretty crappy at Starfire's mode of speech. It seems that unless they talk normally, I can't do it right.

I am sorta planning on a part three, but it's mostly in a planning stage.
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FuzzyNecromancer Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
I look forward to it. Maybe you can try writing the dialogue normally, then reworking it according to starfire linguistic patterns?

If you want tips on the third chapter, remember that, while she might talk more in situations where she opens up, Raven usually uses words like they cost money.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
That might help, thanks. Now, too actually get to writing it! :D
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FuzzyNecromancer Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
Around this point, I'm starting to notice some problems.
1. How can she possibly conceal her belly under her cloak? I mean, it would still be a massive rounded bulge making gurgling noises.
2. What does "surpressed a loud belch" mean exactly? If she held back a burp, she wouldn't know how loud it was. If she just covered her mouth while she burped, you should make that more clear.
3. Your Starfire dialogue needs some work. She shouldn't use contractions, and her language is much more formal than as you present it. I don't even think "freaky" is a word she'd use, and there's no explanation for why she shifted from "Yikes, that's freaky" to "Interesting. Could you demonstrate?"
4I also don't understand why she can't demonstrate on a criminal (they could both fly off and deposit him on a rooftop, out of view of the other titans), or why Starfire would ask for a demonstration knowing what it might entail. Starfire seems to be suffering from plot-induced stupidity, and "what's done is done" seems like a sentiment more appropriate to after Raven's already done the deed.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
Okay, I acknowledge most of your complaints, since I'm not exactly a good planner. I sometimes don't think as I write, I just try to make it seem kind of plausible. I more or less just take influence from other writers and try to do better than I did before. Again, not too many answers that make any sense, but I can offer one.

For the first one, it made sense in my head. When wearing a cloak or cape, if one leans forward slightly, it makes it easier to make something fit inside. I think I should have explained in more detail. Sorry.

And well, I see Starfire as kind of Naive. Though, it's more that I think she'd trust Raven not too hurt her. That's about all I can give, and I know it's not very good.

And yeah, I'm not too great at making someone like Starfire sound right. I'm more used to writing informal dialouge, and things like that.

Sorry if all this detracted from the experience, I was kind of in a rut when this happened, and I just wrote this to get out of it. It wasn't as planned ahead as the first one, and I apologize.

But thanks for the constructive criticism, it's rare I get it.
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FuzzyNecromancer Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
They didn't detract too much. In the second half, Starfire's behavior became more consistent, and made a bit more sense. It's still better than most of the teen titans vore fiction I've encountered (though that's not setting the bar very high).

It's still good for fanfiction.

You seem to gain a grip on Starfire as you go, but if you want further advice, I can give you some simple tips.
1. Starfire does not use contractions. Replace "don't" with "do not", "can't" with "can not", etc.
2. Starfire doesn't use many commonplace or slang words, or if she does, she parses them oddly, perhaps with a gratuitious "the". She also tends to use more formal or tenative language, with a preciseness to it that may be hard to grasp.
3. Starfire uses "friend" as a form of address a lot.

So, "I don't want to judge you, but this is...freaky."
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"I do not wish to judge you, friend Raven, but this is the freaky."
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
I see your points. Well, I hope I can do better in part three, now that I have some tips.
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The-Bloody-Bishop Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2011  Student Writer
Do you have a part three in the works?
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2011
I'm considering. Either that, or a mostly unrelated story with Raven. Would you like a part three?
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The-Bloody-Bishop Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011  Student Writer
Only if you'd like it, though the digestion of most if not all the teen titans might not earn you as much affection as simply one or two members might; some times people get too connected to characters and don't like to see them killed so unpleasently. But on the flip side, if they are all eaten and killed, with the exception of perhaps Cyborg, Raven could acquire most of the Titan's skills using their digestion as a medium to absorb their powers, with the aid of Raven's magic to complete the task. Just think of it, a Raven with not just the powers of telekinesis, dark magic and such but with the power to shot energy beams from her hands and eyes, superstrength, the power to transform into any creature she has seen and knows of, and batman-trained kung-fu to boot! Its like she'd be SuperRaven or something...
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011
There's no digestion this one. And I doubt I'd have the ability to write digestion for the other titans. This is more like just keeping her for a while.

Though bringin the whole team in sounds fun....XD
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The-Bloody-Bishop Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011  Student Writer
You hadn't thought of dragging the rest of the team in the mess when Raven contemplates eating Beast Boy? I assumed it would be like taking just one beer; not long after this "one beer" you're reaching for the next bottle, then another and another. Its a slipperly slope down to the nethermost pits of hell, it is, for those that can't control themselves.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011
Well, it was supposed to be like she ended up getting caught, though after I read your last comment, I thought up something similar to what you just said.
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The-Bloody-Bishop Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011  Student Writer
Its totally your own decision, dude. Do whatever you think is best.
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Ruler101 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011
Oh no, I like your idea a lot more. I mean, with all the crap the poor girl's been through, I think she deserves at least guilty little pleasure.
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VegetaHyuuga Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2010
very sexy I think I'm turned on
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